The Balcony With A View🌲 |Short Story

It was the perfect day. She had done all the planning meticulously. Money, Mobile, sunglasses, the envelope in her purse, and a shoulder bag with a pretty dress she had been saving all her life to wear somewhere worthy. She wanted to travel light. Also, she couldn’t ignore the fact that she didn’t have much money to spend. Though she made sure to buy a hand sanitizer. It was a must. She was allergic to germs (But it had more to do with the fact that it would make her look more sophisticated).

All done, Amber now waited for the bus to arrive. She had it all worked out. She would step out of the bus just near the hotel and then take a cab. That wouldn’t cost much and would guarantee a grand entry too. Her phone rang. It was her mom. She had called to ask if she had her breakfast. She impatiently replied “Yes mom, I have. I am just on my way to the hotel.” Her mom being of the extra cautious species asked her if it was at all necessary to go to the hotel to which Amber responded angrily that this could be her only chance and her mom expected her to leave that too? She had made up her mind. Her mom sighed and was about to add in some more when her bus arrived and she hurriedly said a bye and cut the call.

It was her trip and nothing would dampen her spirit. Nothing!!!

She sat on the bus. The driver looked at her from the rear mirror and suddenly she felt smaller than a peanut. It looked like people were staring at her. She sat up straight. She analyzed it was the right time for her hand sanitizer act. She quickly searched her bag for that and pressed the pump a little bit. Massaging her palms together she started looking outside the window. She felt a lot more confident now.

Her stop arrived. She was unsure if she felt glad or giddy. She held her bag pack close to her. Now, only if she could get the cab it would execute her plan perfectly. Of course for her luck, no cab was to be seen nearby. It was a 10 minutes walk to the hotel. Should I? She thought hard. Ahh, what the hell. Fine, I will just walk and act like I am on the phone.

It was hot outside and by the time she reached the hotel, she was dripping in sweat. So much for the show-off. She walked past the lobby pretending to be on phone. She saw the manager of the hotel. Avoiding glances she went to the reception still doing the phone act when her phone actually started ringing. The irony. The receptionist couldn’t control her smirk. Before the receptionist could react any further,

Amber(stammering): Oh! the call got cut and silly me thinking the call was still well.. Umm going on? (She hated when she couldn’t lie. So close!!!)

Finally, she asked the receptionist for her room key. She just didn’t want to have a chat with her yet.

Receptionist: 202 is it? But aren’t you…?

Amber: Yes, I am Amber. Will you just give me the keys?

Receptionist: But how come you…?

Amber: Well the payment is made isn’t it? I am in a bit of a hurry. Sorry.

Receptionist: Fine. Madam Amber. Here are your room keys. (She wouldn’t leave this chance to taunt her).

Amber took the keys and went to the room. She was well acquainted with the structure. Finally!!! She was here. She couldn’t believe she would be in this room.

She forgot how hungry she was in all the excitement. She took out the sandwich and made herself a hot coffee. She took the tray and sat on the chair and made herself comfortable in the balcony. This was the view she loved and which was going to be her companion for the rest of the day and well the whole night. She was actually living her dream.

Sure, she got weird looks and taunts for being there today but that didn’t matter anymore. She felt thankful to the old lady. Yes, she owed it all to the lady who happened to notice her. Nobody in her whole life had even cared to glance a look at her. She would usually quietly clean the washroom and leave. Though sometimes if there was nobody in the room she would act like it was her room. She would sit by the balcony and gaze outside and start daydreaming. It was one such occasion when she was caught by the old lady. Scared as much as she was but the old lady was kind enough not to complain about her. Instead, she talked to her and asked her whereabouts. Amber nervously answered all her queries. She said sorry and left hurriedly, only to find the next day an envelope in her mailbox.

It was a one-day stay confirmation in the same hotel and in the same room. It could be a trap but she was willing to take that chance. It was her leave the next day and the old lady remembered it all.

She never did believe in angels before but sitting in the balcony, lost in the view, sipping her coffee, she remembered her Angel. Her only Angel.

PS: For all those who have met their Angel or are still waiting for their Angel,

I Heart You All <3


© 2018 short story by MissteriosoDas

Feel free to share this story if you liked and you can connect with me on Instagram: @missteriosodas ~ Head Full Of Dreams ♥ and Twitter: Missbindas ♥

82 Comments Add yours

  1. This is a very nice story, great work.

    1. Thank you so much for appreciating. 🙂

      1. You’re welcome.

  2. I loved it 😘

    1. So glad you loved it. 😍

  3. Ally says:

    So good!

    1. Thank you so much🤗

      1. Ally says:

        You’re welcome!

  4. Isabelle says:

    This is a good read! The opening caught me already and a clue led me to the end. The mystery was not revealed until the end. A bit of a surprise. Excellent observation and narration. Well-done!

    1. I guess that serves my purpose for this story. Thank you so much for appreciating and encouraging me 🙂

  5. Isabelle says:

    My pleasure 😊 I look forward to reading another nice piece.

    1. I will definitely write another one soon. 🙂

  6. Baffledmum says:

    Beautiful! I love how your story’s have a twist, keeps me locked in till the end. And yes I do believe in angels… X

    1. I am so relieved and glad that you appreciate the story. I believe in Angels too. I also believe that if you can’t find one. Be one 🙂

      1. Baffledmum says:

        And that would make this world a beautiful place… x

        1. It certainly would. Maybe someday this can be a reality too 🙂

  7. Winnie says:

    Beautiful story!

    1. Thank you so much <3

      1. Winnie says:

        You’re welcome! ❤️

  8. Auroraboros says:

    What a well written and compelling read! You truly have a way with words, a gift for taking what exists within your head and bringing it to life for the reader. 🙂

    1. I try my best to jot down what I am thinking and if one can actually visualise it then that is the best compliment I could ever great. Thank you so much for the encouragement 🙂 Really means a lot.

  9. floatinggold says:

    Intriguing.

    1. Thank you 🙂

  10. ELLE says:

    You have a great story telling ability! Excited to see more.

    1. Thank you so much. Means a lot🙂

  11. This is a beautiful story.
    Detailed and kept me hooked.

    Well written. 😊

    1. Thank you for appreciating 🙂

      1. You’re welcome. 😊

  12. vishal4u says:

    Nice story, I enjoyed it thoroughly.

    1. So glad you liked it. Thank you🙂

  13. I enjoyed this, it was a very pretty story.

    1. So glad you liked it☺️ Thank you.

  14. desicat says:

    Loved it!!! This story made me smile! 😍

    1. Thank you so much. Your comment definitely made me smile too🤗

  15. Graci says:

    Beautiful short story this one.. great job 😊

    1. Thank you for appreciating.So glad you liked it. 🙂

  16. This is so creative, lovely work! ✨

    1. Thank you so much for appreciating 🤗

    1. Thank you so much ☺️

  17. awesome work! good job!

    1. Thank you for appreciating 🙂

  18. Hi, I nominated you for the Real Neat Blog award 🙂
    https://froggycrochet.wordpress.com/2018/04/21/real-neat-blog-award/

    1. Thank you for nominating me🤗

  19. equipsblog says:

    Wonderful suspense on where the story was going. Sweet ending.

    1. So glad you liked it. Serves my purpose. 🤗

  20. This is amazing! And so inspiring <3 love it, we should act on kindness as much as we speak about it.

    1. I am so glad that you could feel inspired with this post. You’re right. A little kindness goes a long way. ❤️

  21. Resa says:

    That was great!

    1. Thank you so much 🤗

  22. -Eugenia says:

    Compelling and well-written story!

    1. Thank you for appreciating it. Means a lot ☺️

  23. Rêveuse says:

    Awesome story 😊

    1. Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. 🙂

  24. Simplistic and had me smiling throughout! amber is quite the character, loved them!

    1. Thank you so much. This means a lot ☺️

      1. gah! no worries boo xx

  25. ghouszafar says:

    Good Work!!

    1. Thank you so much ☺️

  26. The ending was unexpected and heartwarmimg. Really nice story !!

    1. I am glad you liked it. Thank you so much for appreciating ☺️

  27. iScriblr says:

    Wonderfully penned!❤

    1. Thank you so much for appreciating 🤗❤️

  28. this is great!! especially the end. <3

    1. I am glad you liked it😍

  29. Aditya Kumar says:

    Loved this! ❤ !!Such a Soulful twist in the end !!

  30. Slaxolotl says:

    Love this story, so heartwarming!

  31. Thank you Aditya for appreciating 🙂

  32. It was amazing . A beautiful story.

    1. Thank you so much for appreciating. I am glad you liked it🙂

  33. pramegha says:

    I read it and smiled. I was a very sweet story.😊🌸

    1. I am happy that you smiled while reading it. Thank you so much <3

  34. Enjoyed the read!

    1. Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you😍

    1. Thank you so much ❤

  35. Hairstyles says:

    I don?t even know how I ended up here, but I thought this post was great. I do not know who you are but definitely you are going to a famous blogger if you are not already 😉 Cheers!

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